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Every week we will be starting a new Story Telling competition - with great prizes! The current prize is 2000 NP, plus a rare item!!! This is how it works...

We start a story and you have to write the next few paragraphs. We will select the best submissions every day and put it on the site, and then you have to write the next one, all the way until the story finishes. Got it? Well, submit your paragraphs below!

Story Eight Hundred Fifty Six Ends Friday, November 6

Charlotte stood in line outside the Chocolate Factory, impatiently waiting for the doors to open. The green Kacheek clutched her handful of Neopoints, imagining the chocolate chest of coins she was going to bring home to her family.

It had been a rough week at home, with one of her friends at Neoschool falling ill and her brother Bill having fought with a friend and subsequently being grumpy about it for several days. She hoped she could drop a few chocolate coins by Beth's house later. Maybe some chocolate would help cheer Bill up...

Her thoughts were interrupted by the pets in front of her exclaiming in shock and annoyance. She craned her neck around a Skeith to get a better look.

Two Candychans had fluttered out of the Factory. They were sticking a large sign beside the door that read "CLOSED UNTIL FURTHER NOTICE."

Author: t0tor0
Date: Nov 2nd
"Closed?!" Charlotte exclaimed.

The Candychans took no notice. The crowd had already begun to resignedly dissipate, dejected looks on their faces. Charlotte stood for a moment, not quite ready to accept it. Bill's face had lit up for the first time in days when Charlotte told him she was off to the Chocolate Factory. Beth was laid up at home, probably looking forward to a visit. Charlotte didn't like to disappoint her loved ones. In fact, she hated it.

"You OK?" said a voice. Charlotte was surprised to see the Skeith in front of her, looking at her with concern.

"I just... I really wanted some chocolate coins," said Charlotte.

The Skeith nodded thoughtfully. Then, he said, “Do you still want them?”

Charlotte imagined Bill, smiling with his favourite candy. Beth, getting a chocolatey reprieve from her illness.

“Yes,” she said. “...Why?”

The Skeith grinned. “I know another way into the Factory,” he said.

Author: puppy_sad_eyes
Date: Nov 3rd
Charlotte eyed him curiously. "Another way? Is that allowed?"

The Skeith shrugged, probably trying to look nonchalant, but a mad twinkle in his eyes betrayed him. "Do you want your chocolate coins or not?"

"I do!" Charlotte insisted.

He smiled. "My name is Cad. Follow me."

Cad turned on his heel and began a quick-paced march around the exterior of the factory. Charlotte started, then scrambled to catch up. Boy, Cad was fast! She'd always expected Skeiths to lumber along (but she also knew what people said about assuming things).

Charlotte trotted behind Cad as he all but galloped alongside the Chocolate Factory. As they followed the curve of the large turret, though, instead of turning to stay near the building, Cad kept going straight--across the lane, past the Health Food floret, and into the thicket at the edge of Neopia Central.

Charlotte wheezed as she caught up (Cal seemed to be slowing for her benefit), noticing that they were dropping into a small culvert.

"Is--is that--?" Charlotte stopped to pant. "Is that a SEWER?"

Author: shenmashiai
Date: Nov 4th
“Indeed it is,” Cad replied. “But not to worry—Neopia Central’s sewer systems were updated years ago and some of the oldest passages, like this one here, were no longer needed. The inside is one hundred percent dung-free!”

Charlotte peered through the rusted metal grates. It was pitch dark. She began to question what lengths she was prepared to go to just for some chocolate coins. The “CLOSED UNTIL FURTHER NOTICE” sign on the Chocolate Factory doors troubled her greatly. If not now, when would be her next opportunity to get her paws on the Factory’s famous treats? Cad, who seemed determined to go on with or without her, had already removed the sewer grate with his powerful claws.

“Scared?” Cad asked her, in a voice that was both teasing and concerned.

Charlotte gulped. “Maybe a little. I heard that wild krawks live in there. And mutants!”

The Skeith grinned and shook his head. “Wow, you really believe those urban legends? There’s nothing to be afraid of. Really.” He ventured into the tunnel with an exaggerated slowness. He hoped the Kacheek would follow...her smallness would come in handy later.

With all the courage she could muster, Charlotte stepped into the dark, stony passageway. It may have been her imagination, but she could faintly smell the sweet scent of chocolate.

How will this story end?

Author: hellsangel305
Date: Nov 5th
Charlotte followed Cad's echoing footsteps as they squelched along the river of sewage. She didn’t look at the garbage, preferring to focus on the hint of chocolate in the otherwise rancid air. She was also distracted by Cad. Was she being paranoid, or did the Skeith seem to be very familiar with this particular stretch of the Neopian sewer system?

But it was undeniable: the air did smell like chocolate. If Cad was lying, then what could explain that?

As they squelched in silence, the tunnel seemed to get darker. More ominous. The smell of garbage more concentrated.

“Cad?” Charlotte ventured.

“Hmmm?” he said, rather idly, as if they weren’t traversing a subterranean dump.

“Are we almost there?” she said.

“Oh, yup, real close now. Straight ahead---do you see that light?”

Charlotte did see a light, maybe eight Lupe-lengths ahead, glowing against the wall up ahead. Cad stopped when they were in front of the light, which was really a hole, from which the light was emanating.

“I have to confess something, Charlotte,” Cad said. “I haven’t been entirely honest with you.”

Charlotte’s heart caught in her throat.

“I don’t know a way into the Factory. But, I CAN get you those coins. You see, my name is Cad---short for Cadwallader Constentatious III. I’m the heir of the preeminent private candy collection of my father, Cadwallader Constentatious II. I accidentally dropped a whole box of rare Chocolate Balthazars into this Kacheek-sized hole. I threw my Nova down there to get a better look. That’s where the light comes from.” Cad was starting to speak fast and anxiously. “If you can go down there and get back the Chocolate Balthazars, I’ll give you all the chocolate coins you could ever want!”

Charlotte stared at Cad. “But---but why were you in the SEWER?”

Cad looked down sheepishly. “It’s the only place where I can escape the pressures of my family. I'm starting own chocolate collection down here... away from my dad.”

Actually, Charlotte did understand. She always wanted her brother, her parents, her friends to be happy. She did everything for them. That was what had brought her to the Chocolate Factory in the first place, and the reason she had met Cad at all. It could be a lot of pressure sometimes.

“I’ll help you, Cad,” said Charlotte. “But promise me one thing.”

“What?” said Cad.

“Can you find a better place to hang out than the sewer? Why don’t you come over to my house? My brother Bill would love to hear about your collection. He LOVES chocolate.”

Cad was speechless. (As you can imagine, being the heir to a candy fortune didn't leave you many opportunities for making genuine friends. They were always in it for the chocolate.)

“I would... really like that, Charlotte,” he said.

The End,

Author: puppy_sad_eyes
Date: Nov 6th

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