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You glance back down at the paper in your hand. It reads The Spa: Soroptimist lane, AgentPTEE. You frown and glance up at the simple building in front of you. It's low and flat, made of a pale golden wood. You sigh, shrug your shoulders and open the door.
Instantly, you're bombarded by a small girl with brown hair and hazel eyes. Hiya! she exclaims, What brings you to The Spa today? Wait! Don't tell me! You're here for a massage? she asks hopefully. You hesitate, then agree that you'll see what she has. She jumps up and down. Yay! Follow me, she says, leading you to a side room.
Welcome to The Spa, a simple, spa-themed review site that tries its hardest to offer you quality reviews.
February 26, 2012; 8:29 PM Hola, anyone who sees this. Well, I know I've been horrible and not been working on fixing The Spa, but I'm getting there! Starting today, I'm working on it a whole lot more and will be advertising and getting The Spa in directories like crazy. :)
January 9, 2012; 6:16PM Happy New Year, all! I'm very very sorry for being away so long (I believe it's been 4 weeks?). I've been very busy over Winter Break, and haven't had time to get on. I'm, once again, going on a REVAMP for the time being, as this layout and banner have been messed up (not sure how), and so I'm going to have a custom one made. Thank you for sticking with The Spa, if you're still with me. :)
December 2, 2011
Titus has canceled the request for Dear Dhiar Customs. Also, I won't be able to review during the next two weeks, as I have an amazingly gianormous (as in, you can't comprehend how big it is) research paper for English due the day before break. Therefore, I'll be back at break to review!
-1 request
December 1, 2011
I've completed the review for ShobiClan's application! As of now, I won't take requests for applications.
+1 review
November 27, 2011
I've finished Snowman Pasta's review! The next two will most definitely be finished by or on the first of December.
+1 review
The first thing I notice about your page is the beautiful oriental background! Read more?
Appearance (8.5/10) - The first thing I notice about your page is the beautiful oriental background! It matches perfectly with the picture of Shobi that comes before your text. This is great, because layouts are a huge part of what makes up a page.
However, when I scroll down, I notice that the text runs off the left side of the text box. This can be fixed by either enlarging the text box a small bit, or changing the spacing between the edge of the box and the text itself.
In addition, I would advise changing the purple text color to a color similar to Shobi's skin in the first picture. This would serve to contrast more with the black background, be easier to read, and still be differentiated from the white.
Finally, the hand-drawn (Well, drawn on the computer) picture can use a bit of editing. Only you, of course, can know how to edit it, so unfortunately, I can't offer advice on this.
Overall, you did fairly well on the layout. However, I've taken off 1.5 points for text color change, a need for editing on the picture, and overrunning text.
Content (9/10) - First off, the second sentence, My name is Reyn (and I see you have found my application for ShobiChan the royal kacheek.), should be changed to the following: My name is Reyn, and I see you have found my application for ShobiClan the royal kacheek. This puts the sentence together more, and less choppy, by removing the parentheses. In the sentence beginning with Says the suspicious woman…', 'here' should be changed to 'her'. Also, the sentence before the picture, Says Reyn…starts walking, should be in white.
Next, in the sentence below the picture, 'vbe' should be changed to 'be'. Reyn gulped should be changed to Reyn gulped, with just one 'p'.
Overall, I've taken off one point for minor punctuation and spelling corrections. However, I only went over the text up to before Chapter One: The Boy Who Lived. If you'd like me to check over the rest, I'd be glad to do so. However, I would need more time, but would be happy to do so!
Function (14.5/15) - I started with checking the links that lead to your individual accounts. However, the neohomeschool one leads to your neo_dragon__ account.
In addition, all other links work, including your credits.
Overall, your links are perfectly fine! I'm personally not able to see a reason to change them besides the aforementioned userlookup link. For this, I've taken off half a point.
Overall Conduct (3.5/5)
- I feel that you've done fairly well overall, and don't have much to change. I've taken off one and a half points for minor spelling, grammar, layout, and text changes.This will be a star-scored review. However, if you'd like it to be no-score, please let me know. I'll provide you with in-depth explanations on what needs to be improved and what stood out about your site.
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Function (14.5/15) - I started with checking the links that lead to your individual accounts. However, the neohomeschool one leads to your neo_dragon__ account.
In addition, all other links work, including your credits.
Overall, your links are perfectly fine! I'm personally not able to see a reason to change them besides the aforementioned userlookup link. For this, I've taken off half a point.
Overall Conduct (3.5/5)
- I feel that you've done fairly well overall, and don't have much to change. I've taken off one and a half points for minor spelling, grammar, layout, and text changes.November 26, 2011 | Guild | Requested by Snowman Pasta | Deep Tissue Massage
Layout- The first thing I notice on your layout are your Join, Chat, and Web link buttons. However, the first thing you want noticed is the layout's picture itself. I'd recommend toning down the blue color to match that of the word Carousel on the text box. If the links are an image, I believe this can be fixed through recoloring in a photo editor such as Photoshop, or GIMP.
In addition, your guild description "Friendly and Fun!... in every acre" should be made slightly darker, as it's currently hard to read. This can be done by going into the 'guild layout' sections under admin, then 'Modify Guild Preferences'. Under 'Main Text' you can change the color, or insert a color code.
Also, the textbox should be moved to the left slightly. You can go into the 'Modify Guild Preferences' section, once again, and change a piece of code.
#abt {
width: 210px;
height: 285px;
top: 75px;
left: 125px;
color: #000000;
border: 0px solid #000000;
text-align: center;
overflow: auto;
font-size: 8pt;
z-index: 10;
}
The Left :125 can be changed to a smaller number, to make it closer to the side. This creates the appearance of less crowding.
The Juicy's Icons link should be placed under the dancing duck , or link the duck directly to Juicy's Icons. This would appear more organized.
As a final note, the name Carousel should be more prominent. It could possibly be made to expand over the sides of the text box. This, also, can be done in a photo editor such as Photoshop or GIMP. Soroptimist provides many tutorials on Photoshop and GIMP that can be used to help.
I've taken off a half star for the need for color fixing, one picture that should be linked, and a name that should be more prominent. Overall, your layout is very nice, and needs only minor changes.
Links- All of your links work! However, on your Web, I would advise making the links more prominent. Making them larger, or place them next to the main text box. The preference would probably be placing them to the side on a sidebar, where you can add more information. Check out This Page for advice on how to make a sidebar! However, if you'd simply like to make the links bigger, you can go into the coding and change the px size.
I've taken off another half start for the need for more prominent links.
Optional- I can't see any obvious mistakes on your Web or layout. However, just as a warning, if you press the arrow key to go left or right, only the text moves. Just a heads up.
Overall- Overall, you did a fairly nice job on your layout and web! I've given you four out of five stars for aforementioned reasons.
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Layout- Definitely the first thing I noticed about the layout is the sparkly green Welcome. However, it appears to be too wide for the layout. In addition, the introduction could be rephrased.
A cute Harris walks up to you. This Harris can't get any cuter! you think. It starts to leave, and you follow it. Eventually, you find yourself at a beach full of Harrises. A sign says Welcome to The Cool Fun Fair. As you enter, you know this will be the best day of your life.
Rephrasing it in this way makes your guild seem more put together and, if not professional, then like you know what you're doing.
Also, putting the faerie Harris next to the dancing duck would save space and appear more organized. In addition, instead of just linking to Juicy's Icons, you could use one of her buttons! This adds visual interest. In addition, I'd advise putting the Random Items section at the bottom, as it's less important that the News and Advertising. As a last little tidbit, I'd advise putting the GUILD NEWS above the actual updates. This way, it titles rather than
As a final comment, though, your layout seems to fit the overall theme.
Links- As far as I can tell, all of your links work!
If you'd like me to go over anything else in your guild, let me know and I'll be happy to do so. Remember to link back!
Pros
1. Your colors all match (i.e. they come from the layout and are different variants, also)! This is a big thing that a lot of people can't seem to get.
2. I love that you put up 'user comments'. This involves the 'customer' and makes them feel like they contribute to the page.
3. It's great that you put Requirements and News boxes as one of the top things. This helps visitors know what's new, and what is required right off the bat.
4. The way you set up your directory pages is amazing! I love the little facts and random tips in between some of the boxes. Also, it's awesome how you have it anchored! I've seen some that are completely higgly-piggly, but yours is well done.
5. It's great that you say when things were last updated. It's great for visitors and customers to know that things are recent and up-to-date. No one wants an out of date Best Dressed site, now do they?
Cons
1. I'd advise putting the the link backs and everything under the heading links in the side bar should be put on a Sitely and Banners page. This will make your sidebar smaller, and make your page look even more organized. Or, you could try putting the link backs where everything under the 'links' heading was! This will fill the newly created space.
2. I'd include more than one link to contact me. Rather than list it only at the bottom of the page, why not include a link with the links that link to the anchored spots on that page? This will make it easier to access.
3. For the word 'closed' under Want to Add Your Pet? try using a 'closed' sign! It'll stand out more, in case people don't read that. Or, use a graphic that simply says 'closed' in red letters. It would fit better into your sidebar. Therefore, it's extremely clear that you aren't accepting applications. Some people can be a bit… ah… daft when it comes to these things. Along the same lines, I don't think it's necessary to strike your form through. It doesn't look as professional as the rest of it.
Signs can be found at TLB (The Lunch Box), and a lot more other little pixels that I've found useful.
4. You should clear out your Pet of the Month box! Maybe include another page (linked in the 'sitely' section, maybe?) that lists past Pet of the Months?
Notes: Sorry I couldn't find more wrong with your site! Although, I'm sure that's a good thing for you. Overall, your grammar and spelling are fine, and I can't see any noticeable things that need to be improved. (I'd actually like to ask how you got your perfect 'News' boxes!).
If you have any questions, comments, or otherwise with your review, please let me know and I'll be happy to reply.
Remember to link back to The Spa!
the Fit (3/3) You did a great job picking a layout for your page. There are a few things that should be fixed for appearance purposes, but those will be covered in the Appearance section.
the Function (7/7) All of your links work! This is a huge plus for visitors, as it's horribly inconvenient to have broken links. Make sure you are constantly checking your links to make sure they're still active. Also, I'd advise linking to your userpage rather than the message itself so that people know who they're messaging. At the moment, it shows a completely blank neomail. Also,the coding boxes beneath your link back buttons should be changed to actual textboxes. The following code can be used.
textarea {
height: 29px;
width: 88px;
border: 1px solid #ccc;
background-color: #eee;
margin: 2px auto;
margin-right: 2px;
margin-top: 2px;
font: 9px georgia;
letter-spacing: -1px;
color: #ccc;
}
This is the textarea I use underneath my own link back buttons. Now, your text areas will be able to show the exact coding you used for your buttons. This can be put underneath your buttons by using [textarea]put coding here[/textarea]. Of course, replace the []'s with the coding tags.
I took two points off, as the userpage linking would be preferable to what you have now, and the coding boxes.
the Appearance (6/10) My advice would be to make more noticeable headers. This is for a more organized look. At the moment, you just have the pale orange words above the pictures. You can use something simple, such as:
h3 {
font-family: century gothic;
font-size: 18;
color: #838111;
text-transform: uppercase;
border-bottom: 2px dashed #838111;
}
This will create the dashed header I use for my updates. You can change the colors, of course. Also, you can find ideas from premade petpages (as long as the site owner allows you to use coding portions, of course).
Additionally, I recommend changing your colors to something less harsh, possibly a few shades of blue to match your banner. Also, it would be preferable to make your side bars smaller. At the moment, they are as large as your main textbox, which diverts the attention away from the center. This can be done by going into the coding and finding the sidebar text. Then, change the width and height pixels to something smaller until it is an appropriate size. The main text box should be a bit smaller, also. Possibly 500 x 600 px. Maybe not in that order. Or, find what suits you! At the moment, it's too large for visitor convenience. Along the same lines, it would be preferable to make your links and regular text smaller. Find the font: xx px Georgia (or whatever the font is) and make the pixels smaller, once again. This will give your page a more organized, more professional appearance.
Also, put everything in that left sidebar on a page to itself! You can keep the updates there, but put them in a scrolling box. Maybe put a short little welcome message?
Finally, take the last four links out! They are unnecessary, as it is obvious where these are. Instead of these, link to the page you put all of these things on by putting 'sitely'.
Notes: Overall, your layout's colors and sizing could have been better, but it will be a great site! I wish you the best of luck for your site.
Overall Score: 16 out of 20
Cons
1. I'd advise aligning your guild chat to the left This can be done by inserting [div align="left"] before the words and [/div] after the words. This will make it appear more organized.
2. The link is a bit difficult to read. I recommend changing the font to black, or a very dark silver. A lot of font colors can be found at sunnyneo's 'make a rainbow font'. Just choose your color and copy the code for it (if you don't all the codes already).
3. The quality of the picture of the team members could be improved. It's a great picture, don't get me wrong. However, there is a white, almost dashed, line around the image. It's even a few millimeters away, which may be a problem in some browsers. Try putting it in photoshop and using the color of the layout to block that line.
4. The colors of the guild itself don't go very well with the layout. The layout looks amazing, while the colors inside the guild don't go with the layout very well at all. I'd recommend changing them to colors from the layout.
5. In your advertisement, you should probably mention how many members and council members you have. That's what a lot of guild-searchers look for in guilds: If you have open council (which you do) and how many members you have.
Notes
1. Your layout is great! I know I mentioned this before, but it truly is. That is a huge factor in guilds: their first appearance. Your guild presents a great first appearance.
November 26, 2011
We've received three review requests over the past week! It appears that things are looking up for The Spa. I'll be finishing two today.
+3 requests
November 10, 2011
The Spa is back, under a new name (I've removed the 'Mesmeric' part) and new layout!
+1 layout
September 24, 2011
I'm sad to say there's still no change in status. At all. So sorry!
+0 reviews
September 24, 2011; 6:51PM
Hi hi. I'm a terrible person, I realize this. I still haven't done the review. I haven't done anything in a long time. I know. BUT, I have boatloads of homework. I promise to finish the review soon.
On the up side, I'm getting a new layout. This one just isn't working for me. It's beautiful, but The Spa needs a change. A big one. So, the layout will be changed; probably something much simpler. Well, please keep checking in because I promise The Spa will become much more active. So... I'll shut up.
September, 15, 2011; 5:14PM *sigh* I know, I haven't updated or done anything since, like, what was it... the ninth? So sorry! Ugh, being a freshman sucks. Especially when you don't know anyone. Well, anyways, teachers have given us tons of homework. This is my first chance to update.
September 7, 2011; 3:32PM Yay! Watcha guys think of the new layout? I personally love it. It' definitely a lot different from the last one. I've edited a couple of things and it's absolutely perfect, if I may say so myself! So, let me know what you think.
September 7, 2011; 11:30AM Hey all. So, I'm starting school tomorrow, so I will definitely not be on as much, as mentioned before. I'm trying to finish up those two review today!
September 5, 2011 Yay! I'm back from Sea World! I finally have access to TCFF, so I'll be starting that review today.
August 28, 2011
I'm starting The Cool Fun Fair's review as soon as I'm able to access it (it's a private guild).
Also, I received a review from Trance today! A few small changes have been made around the site.
I forgot to mention, we got a review from The Marchen yesterday, which also resulted in some changes.
So, remember, reviews are open and keep an eye out for new things!
August 25, 2011
Once again, it's been nearly a month since I've updated. Terribly sorry! I've had personal issues and just haven't been able to get on.
In addition, we haven't had any requests(Therfore, I have no idea who I'm talking to)! If you have any suggestions what-so-ever that could help, they're much appreciated. In the meantime, I'll be trying to get word out that The Spa has open reviews, so you'll probably see me around. I did get two new review types up, however, including that just for guilds one!
July 27, 2011
Hey guys! Sorry I haven't been updating. I'm still working on Taryn's review. I just haven't been able to get on due to personal issues. I'm almost finished with the review, and a just-for-guilds review-type is on the way!
July 8, 2011
I've finished Berry's Best Dressed reivew! I'll start on everyone else's as soon as possible.
June 29, 2011 I've finished Syd's Dailies Page review! I've put it up and will begin working on Berry's page next. :)
June 28, 2011 We are now affiliated with Wonder Pop! Please check out her site. :) Additionally, I forgot to update that we are now affiliated with Collegiate!
June 23, 2011 Finished Kate's review! I've put it up and will be working on Syd's Dailies Page next.
June 20, 2011 The Spa's Grand Opening! Make sure to check out our newest massage (Moisture Revival) for newer sites.
June 18, 2011 I received my review from HTOGS (linked in credits). I fixed a lot of things based on her feedback, and The Spa is better than ever!
May 29, 2011 The Spa was made as a brand-new review site!
May 28, 2011 Mesmeric was formed into a brand-like name
January 1, 2011 Mesmeric was created as a petpage making site!
All buttons link back to their creators, except the first one below, whose creator I can't seem to find anymore. The buttons below are retired buttons.
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Oh! Emma exclaims, How could I ever forget? I'd like to thank all of the lovely people who helped me with my business. Thanks to them, it's doing magnificently! She grins sheepishly and shows you another sheet.» Layout template from [That Kills Me.]
» Layout, Text, and Coding editing by Emma
» Best viewed in and New! Buttons by Foomanshu.
» Resources by TLB
» Thanks to Apartment Nine for wonderful site making tips!
» Thanks to How To Offer Great Service for even more great tips on how to make an amazing site.
» Thanks to nuclear_Onyx for showing me Stylus- A Web Design Source, which helped a lot with the spacing between the buttons' coding boxes.
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