First Place: Rii for Star Gazing
Awarded: 300 points + 25 points for participation
Feedback: This story really touched me. I could relate to both of the characters and I love how you explained their relationship and how it unfolded as the story went on. At the very beginning it's not quite clear (at least to me) who is speaking when, but other than that I didn't really notice any technical mistakes. The description and imagery in this story is also beautiful.
Grade: 79/100
Second Place: Raine for Darkness Eternal
Awarded: 200 points + 25 points for participation
Feedback: What impressed me the most was just the originality and creativity of this piece. I don't know what I was expecting, but that wasn't it. Secondly, I love the all the names of the characters, places, and things in the story. Very creative, once again. Maybe it's just me, but the end seemed a bit rushed. I mean the story can't go on forever, I know, but it was summed up so quickly that I'm still not quite sure what happened and how Solyss gained power. There were also a couple minor spelling and grammar issues, but nothing that I really need to point out.
Grade: 74/100
First Place: Rii for Lost Autumn Romance
Awarded: 300 points + 25 points for participation
Feedback: I loved the imagery that went into this. Technically-speaking, this piece was almost perfect. It could have been improved by better indicating the shift from reality to--and forgive me for this word but--hallucination. I had a hunch as to what was going on so I was fine with the sudden use of "he," but the transition could be smoother. I loved how an entire relationship was summarized by a mere paragraph as did I love what I thought was a vague implication that this sort of meeting with her late husband has happened before. That she's still full of melancholy at the end made it clear to me that despite the pleading of her husband's ghost, her time was short, and to read deeper into this, that could be connected to the fact that winter (what is usually associated with death) is on its way.
Grade: 78/100
Second Place: Cali for An Autumn Breeze
Awarded: 200 points + 25 points for participation
Feedback: Although there were a handful of typos and fragments, the overall story was one that I thought engaging. I found myself hanging on the words, because I wanted the family to take the cat in and had to see what the girl would ultimately decide. The beginning had a vagueness about it, and while that did prompt further reading to find answers, there was room for confusion. Specifying a bit more might benefit as would additional description, perhaps even a bit of dialogue.
Grade: 68/100
Third Place: Alex for Dancing in Autumn
Awarded: 100 points + 25 points for participation
Feedback: There wasn't a rhyme scheme, but I did find something interesting. I don't know if this was intentional, but there was a certain similarity I discovered between the words "down" and "ground." I read them to rhyme, and I did want to mention that because, for me, that faux couplet made the poem seem all the more poetic. There was a clear repetition involving the sky and the wind, and I did like the end in which the leaves rose up again as if to give a sense of rebirth. I can't extract much else from the poem, however. One thing worth mentioning is that there was no punctuation, and I would suggest adding it in where necessary.
Grade: 65/100
First Place: Revv for Fear
Awarded: 300 points + 25 points for participation
Feedback: For the record, I'm not a huge poetry buff, but I certainly tried to give Fear a solid evaluation. To begin, although there's such a thing as artistic style, every line of a poem should be capitalized and a few of the commas should actually be semicolons. As a sequence of events to illustrate hearing what's not there, the poem was very well organized. Neither the rhyming scheme nor the meter was consistent throughout, but that didn't make the poem any less effective. A few of the rhymes stuck out to me because they were less obvious, such as "scare" and "there." Overall, the poem had a nice flow and read well. Its concept was easy to relate to, and I personally can't tell you how many times I've looked over my shoulder fearing that someone was there. Even so, I wonder if the poem could have been improved by drawing from other images or instances of fear in order to better encompass its experience. For me, Fear was a very fun read, and I very much enjoyed how something so simple was made into something chilling.
Grade: 72/100
Second Place: Alex for Untitled
Awarded: 200 points + 25 points for participation
Feedback: Untitled struck me as an excellent skeleton and snippet. The structure and the technical bits such as spelling and grammar were all there as was the gist of its dark storyline, but I felt that it could have had so much more flesh. The description that did show up was good, and I wished that there was more of it. I also wanted to know more about what our protagonist was feeling, what the face of her dead father looked like, and perhaps some more about the protagonist and her family prior to this traumatizing event. I had a lot of questions by the piece's end (who was the protagonist? what was the monster doing? how did the monster get to her house? why her family?), and while it can be beneficial to leave some questions unanswered for the sake of generating reader curiosity, others might be better off answered. I'm convinced that if this was given more detail and background, then it would be just phenomenal. I wholeheartedly hope that Untitled is expanded on.
Grade: 61/100
First Place: Kaelyn for Ring of Fire
Awarded: 300 points + 25 points for participation
Feedback: Considering its pre-story breakdown of all things related to demons, Ring of Fire was clearly given a fair amount of thought prior to its conception. That said, I wish that there was more information to be squeezed directly from the text about this fantasy AU. There was at least one typo and a few misplaced commas, but overall the work was of a good quality. Imagery was well used in spite of a few cliches, and the vocabulary as well as the punctuation was pleasingly varied. The characters featured in the piece are left ambiguous even by the end, though I still felt most attached to poor Mrs. Kindra. I enjoyed how each section prior to the climax gradually built up to the introduction of Leigh. As a short story, it followed a solid plotline and incorporated the prompt in an interesting way that even included a prominent symbol. All along I thought the protagonist was to find hope amongst tragedy; little did I know that he himself was the story's hope. And--excuse the cheese--I myself hope to see more of this author.
Grade: 70/100