Let's begin with the Disclaimer at the start of the splash page. I AM using IE, and it looks fine in my large resolution (don't know the exact). The thing is, if you are going to go with white text on black, the little bullet points are just so small and I have to squint to read it. Other than that, you put the disclaimer in a giant, eye-catching font and yeah! The rest of the splash page is super cool with the clicking and "choose your path". Kudos to you for making me want to continue! I clicked on the recommended petpage first, so we'll head to that next!

First, the layout of the petpage is very pretty and appealing: the picture is cute and looks great with the background you picked out. In the elder's passage, I wouldn't capitalize people in this sentence: "The People adored her practically to the point of worship - they sang songs in her name and praised her every arrival." Since it's the elder talking, I already assume he's talking about the people of the land, not some people called "The People". Unless that's what they're called. Your little section of the winds was really interesting, and I learned stuff I hadn't known. You do have a lot of winds listed, why don't you list your favorites/most interesting/important winds?

For your story, I'm only going to mention something if it's a mistake or a weird context. So far, your writing style is really beautiful and paints a wonderful fantasy picture. I really don't know how to criticize something that's near perfect.

In her "likes", it's not necessary to capitalize bees in this sentence: "Insects other than Bees (they merely drift about and are too feeble for notice)". Again, there is no need to capitalize people, since you seem to enjoy that a lot.

I absolutely love how you got neopians to write a little about what it's like without the Wind. It's a really nice touch connecting the two. Another thing I love is how you are connecting your current pets and characters to Nimorika. It's a hint of your neo family and a promise of the home Nimorika would have.

And that's it for the petpage! It's honestly amazing, the story is intriguing and creative and the writing is beautiful. The only thing is you seem to capitalize words that just don't need to be capitalized.

Now, to the application which is probably just as wonderful as the petpage. First off, layout is beautiful, there are so many ways to match a layout coloring with the colorings of the faerie xweetok.

Three little mistakes, quick skip down to the family: "Specimen 444440 was resurrected by the Society and helped them rise to power by taking out political opponnts, but eventually went rogue." I believe you spelled opponents wrong. ^-^ The next little mistake is also in the Family section: "Gasha has evolved perfectly into a Neopian character. He is a major influence in every plot line (he resurrected both Ziqil and Rep, though they are on seperate "sides")" Just a tiny switch from "seperate" to "separate". The last little mistake is in the outro, thanking people section: "~Lily for proofreading vigurously and constantly". Vigurously should be spelled: "vigorously".

That's it. Your application was very sincere and honest, kind of the same thing, but hey!

To end, your entire application (including the splash page and petpage) was beautiful. Original, honest and intriguing. I don't really have anything bad to say about it. It is obvious you put a lot of effort into it, and it shows your dedication to Nimorika. I fell in love with your character and was absorbed by your writing style. This is the best app I have ever seen, and I wouldn't hesitate to give Nimorika to you.

Okay, app time.

The disclaimer page is cute. The font is way too small though, and in all honesty my first reaction was to skip it, but I forced myself to read on. It's most verbose however, but unless this is part of the 'style' of your application, so to speak, you could leave it. Be aware that it might be skipped.

Now, onto the petpage section. In the first paragraph, this line stood out for me: 'predators lived in these parts, but those that did were never hungry'. This idea is only furthering the notion of some sort of oasis or whatever, but it's not awfully realistic. I suppose it doesn't matter too much, but the sceptic in me chuckled.

This haven, however, like all havens, needed a force to sustain it' How many havens can there be? Are we talking Garden of Eden quality, or what? This is wordy and unnecessary.

This force was the rain, and these rains were brought by a specific Wind. She was among the only winds that could brave the Eastern Mountains, and the only wind to do so while being strong enough to bring the Rains with it.' Way too messy. The sentence structure here is a little off the rails. Semicolons are your friends.

Her name was Nimorika, the Wind of Nimorika' As in she comes from some place called Nimorika? Is Nimorika some kind of title?

The section you have about the different kinds of wind is cute, but definitely skip-able. Wikipedia, anyone? It fits with the overall layout of your application/petpage (read: wordy) but I think a brief dictionary definition would have sufficed.

no pain in her world (only pleasure),' Yes, that's what 'no pain' means.

was neither here nor there- she could think and feel and yet was not touched by time or eternity. There was no boredom, no sadness - only the joy of little things in life.' These two sentences are essentially the same. We get it, she's in Nirvana.

She knew nothing of why she took her annual journey; she hardly knew that time passed at all' We are aware of this because you said the exact same thing just last paragraph.

The Wind beat her butterfly wings (from which her wind came)' Ugly sentence is ugly.

This was the season of winter and snow' It's one or the other. They're essentially interchangeable. Just choose one.

and for this season she always traveled the Mountains. The snow never fell the same way twice, as every snowflake was unique, so this journey was never quite the same' One: she travels the MOUNTAINS in winter? Two: 'as each snowflake was unique'……

She played with the bunnies and raced with a fox, tickled the bears and poked the ox. The stars twinkled and the Father Frost gleamed - just like the average winter this all seemed.' I don't understand this random reference to poetic prose? What's the point of this couplet, exactly?

On that Spring the Rains did not come' If you haven't capitalized 'winter' before now, don't do the same to spring. Also, Rains? How about 'rains'.

The crops suffered and thousands died, people prayed and magicians lied...' I don't even – what does this MEAN? It's fluffy and random. Like, is this some kind of hidden poke at rel igion, or something?

I'm not going to go any further, but basically re. story: tidy it up. There are A LOT of sentences that say the same thing, over and over, and to be perfectly honest – it's kind of boring. I'm not drawn into your story at all. I get that she's some kind of wind fairy who flies around with her four antennae and plays with rabbits.

(simple beauty, and yet nothing else can compare... and attract bees)' One word: awkward. This sentence is gross.

Avians (the only beings fit to rule the skies along with the Winds)' 'avians'?

Politics (so dull and boring and always fail to please), Death (a trivial thing - happens to everyone), Insects other than Bees (they merely drift about and are too feeble for notice)' 1: Well, of course she wouldn't be interested in politics. This is too random to mention, tbh. 2: 'death – a trivial thing'? I suppose it would be to someone who's eternal. 3: I don't even get the bee thing.

Also, I noticed that in the sort of 'about Nimorika' section you have, there's the line 'Wind of Nimorika - a sudden and sharp squall which brings the rain to the Dreaming Land every spring.', but then you have under responsibilities: 'Bringing the Rains past the Mountains to the Dreaming Land every year and taking moisture from the rainforest.' - which is essentially the same thing and is repetitive.

The 'personality' section is kind of baffling. I can't put my finger on what's so wrong with it. Maybe because in the intro, she's got this rep of being pretty chilled, but caring? And now we find out that she basically doesn't care about anything except, idk, flowers?

Everyday, I visit Gasha with a sliver of hope' …'Gasha'?

Ah, now I've read a little further I see the section where you've included other users in the story. Hm. Interesting idea. I don't think it works very well, because it lessens the fantastical element of the story and instead gives it a sense of a realism, which might be what you're going for, but really it makes it seem kind of My Immortal RPish. (It kind of comes across that you've trolled the boards about your app and gotten a bunch of people to just randomly chuck their two cents in).

Oh okay, Gasha is a pet. Right.

I skipped the rest of the story, and here's the rundown: Long and wordy. If I had to summarize your story, it'd go like: 'Fairy likes rain, leaves for some reason, a pet sings about rain, it comes back.'

Now, onto the proper app. Might I add, at this point, that a link onto the actual application would be handy? Only because I had to navigate back to the very beginning and it was most troublesome.

I gotta say, your title 'Something smells of squid'… like, legit? Is this what you wrote? Is Nimorika a maraquan pet? What does this even mean? It totally ruins the ~mystical vibe you're going for.

anything you read here is what I choose to reveal, and I've been studying Psychology for long enough to be able to say that it is flawed.' Seriously, this sentence is what I would, in different circumstances, call 'name dropping'. Get rid of the psych bit. It feels out of place and, if I may, like you're trying to be superior in some way.

I do promise that what you read here will be the truth, as wholly as I can reveal.' Can you say: contradiction!

Alas, it is impossible to predict the future, but I do feel the need to inform you of what I have in store for the Bottled Wind of Nimorika' Just call her Nimorika. Jeez, louise.

Blah blah blah… stop calling her 'the Wind' or 'the Bottled Wind'! 1. it sounds so awkward, and 2. it's so affected. Pretentious. Pompous. It's like in seventeen century England when the monarchy refused to be addressed by anything other than 'Your Eminence' or 'Oh Holiest One'. It's seriously amusing, but I know this isn't what you're going for, so in this case I'd recommend you just stick to her first name.

There is nothing quite special about me in Reality.' Reality shouldn't be capitalized.

I'm not a published author, or a brilliant doctor or scientist... but I am what I am.' Please contact Confucius at your earliest convenience. 'I am what I am'?

I am a second-year Psychology and Russian and Eastern European Studies double-major at a massive university in Texas and plan to pursue a career in Positive Psychology after finishing some grueling years of graduate school.' Longest sentence in the history of the English language.

focusing on social rejection and competition-based perception' I find this rather ironic within the context of an application for a popular, unconverted pet.

I ran out of time to keep on reading the rest of your application, unfortunately. Here's the rundown:
- Be more concise. In my opinion, it shows greater skill to show what you mean in a limited number of words than in several pages.
- The coding/art is all fantastic. It's a beautiful application, visually, and it shows so much work and dedication. :) I applaud you: it's truly a wonderful feat.
- Basically… be less affected. I don't know how to say this without sounding terrible, but you sound so pompous. Incredibly, incredibly pretentious. You sound like a con man buying his own game. Loosen up a little. If you sound like you're at a funeral, do you really think the foster wants to read ALL THE STUFF you've written?

This is a great application, Olly. I hope I've provided some insight – and I haven't been too scathing! Congratulations on a job well done so far. This app will get you over the line, but it's not fantastic yet.