Hello and welcome to this page I like to call my the app improvement page, because I love reading apps, and people like to ask for ways they can improve theirs! If you asked me for any app improvement tips you can usually find them here - unless I put them on the board or NM'ed you.
/~wisps» Love that you wanted Hieroglyphic before UFA
» Love that you have other pets that prove that you really like fitting names/color/species
» Good to see that you are planning on making the lookup already
» I've seen you haven't linked things, but are planning to - those would be great to show concrete examples :)
» You said you enjoy Egyptian history - maybe you could expand on that somehow?
» Also, since you said you like your pets to have a personality/character (albeit short), maybe you could write one for Hieroglyphic?
Overall, nice application. I think the way to improve it would just be to continue showing examples of plans! I think your strongest point would be the reason why you want Heiroglyphic.
Good luck! :* Feel free to ask me any questions! I read your app from start to finish :)
/~cloezi» Unique take on application/petpage - yay!
» Looove this: but this is your first big case, and I'm sure you want to do well.
» I even made him a spa appointment today. Lol. x)
» The transition to showcasing your pets was so smooth!
» Didn't read your other pets' stories, but I'm sure they're as great as Tal's; nice to see your other ones have stories too!
» each file will be a different case of hers. Like the best sentence from your app. Because I think it's awesome that you want to do so much more than you've already done with Tal (and you have evidence that you will do it!) and I love the idea of the cases.
» Agent 919 Creative!
» Love the unique adoptable cards.
Ahh love how cool your application is! Awesome to see how everything fit together and the entirety of it was a story in itself.
No need for me to say good luck haha. Congrats on Agent 919! And of course, I read your entire app!
/~Kate_xwee» And if things so sideways Did you mean go?
» Love the axes approach for the personality. Reading through it gave me a really good idea of the type of person (mynci?) she is
» Ahh! Love how your story includes your other pets so nicely. And your genuine love for mynci's is quite apparent. :)
» Enjoyed the story, and loved how their background was so apparent in the story.
» Nuna would be hacked into the security system hack into the*
» I she took the upper floors and I took the lower. remove the I at the front*
» in the direction of upstairs awkward; maybe just put 'upstairs' instead?
» There, lying face-down on the ground(insert comma here)
» plaque on a door saying Office reading Office?
» who it was that let Boo into the house Love how you included this statement! Makes the story so much more mysterious haha.
» I absolutely love that you have different accounts with different themes and stories and that multiple pets of yours are linked together. I think that is so neat! However, I don't think you linked any of your other stories to the app. It would be a good idea to do so!
Overall, I really like your application and think it is really complete. Great job! :D
Gooood luck! & of course, I read the entire app :)
/~autume» First impression: pleasing to the eye; amazing art; awesome! Also, congrats on being a finalist. Put on the song you requested as well haha
» The idea of Omeitia is so creative. I like it when people connect their pet family together. The depth of the world is awesome. Love the drawing of it too.
» Within Iveri is different lakes are*
» I liked reading Ch.1 and was waiting for more!
» I have a lot of boxes/lots of cool items saved from the last while Saved from the last while?
» The font matches the story! yay cool.
» I really appreciate your farewell message because you convey that you learned so much, regardless of whether you get Bri, and that you would still use her character!
Looking at your app as a whole, you've put a lot of effort into it, and the character, and even moreso the world you've created, sound so cool and well-thought. Congrats on becoming a finalist, and good luck ^_^
(ofc, I read the whole thing!)
/~grrr» I like how your baby pets indicate that you like pets with fitting names
» In your About Condemns section you only have a customization - maybe describe Condemns a little more whether that be personality, likes, dislikes, petpet, reasons for customization, or the neopet itself, or why Condemns is so fitting! Let's get to know the dragon a little more!
» You say that you will complete the story if you are chosen. In order to show the owner that this will indeed happen, maybe you can provide an example of a finished story for one of your pets? (maybe finish Cemator's?)
» I enjoyed the first part of the story and would really like to know more! Urge you to continue it.
» Also, I think you should include what else you like doing for your pets. Like is customization your thing? Love Cemator's customization. Do you have a specific fondness for draiks? So it's more clear why you want Condemns.
Overall I think your application has a great start but I would love to see more of the character/story of Condemns. I think the idea is really great so far.
Good luck to you! (I read the whole app, promise!) Let me know if you have any questions.
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