Date: August 1, 2012
Review Type: The Sweeper Review
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#1. The quotations at the beginning of each chapter. I recommend adding a period at the end of the quotation and moving the name of the person who said the quotation outside of the quotation marks.
#2. The use of their versus his or her. Contrary to popular belief, the term their cannot be used to describe a singular person with an unknown gender. It is actually used to describe a plural subject. Unfortunately, instead you will have to use the three words his or her to describe said subject.
#3. To Summarize. In the title of this section, I recommend you replace the ellipses with a colon. As well, the colour of this text does not stand out very well against the white background of your content box. I recommend making it either larger, darker, or add a text decoration to "extend it" like the other headers in this section to better separate the content from the summary. It was a bit difficult to differentiate between the content sections and the To summarize section.
#4. Consistent Headers. From chapters 1 through to 3, the headers remained quite consistent. However, as I moved on to chapter 4, I noticed that the headers changed to one that is much more subtle. I recommend that you maintain consistency with your headers and stick to using only one of the designs. Different headers should only be used if there is a separate purpose to each one. (i.e. Design 1 for main header, design 2 for subheader, design 3 for lists, etc.)
#5. Comma Usage (Or Lack Of). Watch out where you are or aren't using commas! I will place more emphasis on where you lack commas. Try to read your sentences out loud or in your head and notice where you naturally pause. These areas are usually places where you require commas.
#6. Chapter Titles. I recommend that in the titles for each chapter, you include something such as Chapter 7, CH 7 or even #7, just to make it easier for your readers to know which sections of the guide they are reading.
#1. Let's Look At Your Resume. First, get the site owner's permission and let them know that you'll be reviewing his or her petpage as "practice".
#2. Let's Look At Your Resume. In fact, there's a section on this site called Peer Reviewed...
#3. Let's Look At Your Resume. Another thing you can do is visit review sites and read through their reviews. Be sure to pay attention to what makes the reviews helpful: are they fully explaining their viewpoints? Are they using visual aids such as screenshots? Not only should you be looking at how they review, but also judge for yourself the quality of the reviews. Are the reviewers focussing too much on the smaller details and not enough on the big picture? (** Singular/plural agreement between review sites and "their" reviews)
#4. Important Traits of a Reviewer. …you'd be surprised how many reviewers I've seen let their biases enter their reviews. (** Singular/plural agreement between reviewers and the objects.)
#5. Important Traits of a Reviewer. Running a review site can be draining, whether it's from dealing with people who disregard the rules or reviewing sites that you feel just aren't very high-quality.
#6. Important Traits of a Reviewer. A lot of things can test your patience but it's important to keep a level head and remain calm. (** This is purely an opinion based comment, as I felt that keep calm sounded a little colloquial.)
#6. Important Traits of a Reviewer. You should be able to write your reviews as if you are in a debate class, in which you're trying to get your point across to someone who (removed the word will) always disagrees with you.
#7. Important Traits of a Reviewer. ** Here's a general comment for the ability to argue your point and persuade the site owner blurb: Instead of using directives in this section, I recommend that you describe the trait and save the suggestions for another chapter. So the phrase Don't try to be an aggressive arguer… would not be fitting in this section of your site that is purely meant for describing characteristics. May I recommend the following: You need to be able to provide constructive criticism as opposed to slamming someone else's site.
#8. Important Traits of a Reviewer. ** In the last sentence, I recommend removing the words I think because these two words make you sound unsure of yourself and your guide should be written in a more confident tone.
#9. What To Review? Petpages, guilds, pet applications - there's so many things to review!
#10. What To Review? ** Instead of using the word limits in the second sentence, I recommend you use the word weaknesses to counter the word strengths used after.
#11. What To Review? Under guilds: A lot of guild reviewers are or have been guild owners…
#12. What To Review? Under pet applications: As mentioned in the previous category, reviewing pet applications requires extensive knowledge…
#13. To Summarize. …to help other people improve their sites.
#14. To Summarize. ** In the second bullet point, another review should be another reviewer. I would also suggest that you move reviewing isn't for everyone to the beginning of this bullet point, as it is the main point of the bullet.
#1. Important Sites To Visit. ** After the phrase though often ignored in the past should immediately be the object that it is describing. However, currently it is more and more sites instead of the quality of service of a site. Try rewording it so that the specific object being described immediately precedes the descriptive fragment.
#2. A Community Of Reviewers. Within the site community (remove at large) (insert comma here) there's a smaller community of reviewers.
#3. A Community Of Reviewers. After writing a review, you may want to ask another reviewer what he or she thought of your finished product.
#1. Opening Part. ** For the first sentence, the portion before the comma (As reviewers) does not describe the portion that comes directly after the comma (your site). As well, there are some singular/plural subject agreements with this sentence. Consider revising it to the following: As a reviewer, you own a site that offers content in the form of words, text, and persuasion!
#2. Opening Part. No, I'm not talking about the Jane Austen novel, but instead good old fashion opinions.
#3. Opening Part. Your reviews offer suggestions and comments to requesters.
#4. Terms I Use Throughout This Guide. In other words, you'll be critiquing his or her site.
#5. The Word "Harsh" Doesn't Mean A Thing. ** I would recommend that you move the definitions of critical and in-depth to below the sentence What it should be is critical and in-depth, both of which features of a high-quality review. I believe it will be more effective because you will be "feeding" your reader fewer definitions at a time. As well, the references you make to the definition of "harsh" in the paragraph beneath the definitions will be more clear with only one definition preceding it.
#6. The Word "Harsh" Doesn't Mean A Thing. They want to convey the idea that their reviews take even the smallest detail into account.
#7. How To Describe Quality. …so that you're not bashing or hurting the site owner's feelings when you're describing his or her site.
#8. How To Describe Quality. …because you're letting the site owner know that there are areas that need improvement.
#9. How To Describe Quality. A common mistake that new reviewers make… (** Personally I believe that "commit" describes "crimes", but again, this is not a concrete fact and may as well be merely personal preference.)
#10. How To Describe Quality. A review is a collection of your opinions and the site owner has asked you for them.
#11. How To Describe Quality. …and is more likely to make the other side owner feel bad or less confident about his or her work.
#12. Using An Assertive Tone. …his or her impression of you is that you are a rude reviewer. (** Currently it sounds as if the requester will make assumptions that a rude reviewer would make.)
#13. Using An Assertive Tone. Another problem is with the overall tone ("you definitely have to change it"), which makes it appear as if the reviewer…
#14. Using An Assertive Tone. Sure, you're saying something negative about his or her site. but here, the way you're saying it…
#15. Using An Assertive Tone. You're presenting an (delete the word "your") opinion without using a negative attitude.
#16. Using An Assertive Tone. If the reviewer used "low-quality" instead of "ugly, this would have been an assertive statement, but because of the overly negative tone, it's an aggressive statement instead.
#17. Using An Assertive Tone. …it's completely fine to say "the choice is up to you" because a smaller problem won't drastically affect his or her site. (** Phrasing issues - again, personal preference!)
#18. Using An Assertive Tone. ** A general comment about this section: I understand that it is difficult to explain the differences between the three types of statements! However, I found that I was a bit confused as I was reading. One part I was especially confused about was at the very end, where you categorized a passive-sounding statement as an assertive one. I think you should provide additional examples to further explain the differences!
An interesting idea would be to include a link to a "quiz" at the end, where you provide 10 or more sentences and ask the reader to determine what kind of tone each sentence/phrase has. On a separate page, you can include the correct answers and a short explanation. Good to hear that you are adding a quiz factor to your site!
#19. To Summarize. ** First bullet point: change their to his or her.
#1. Building Your Rubrics. One of the first things a new reviewer should always think about are the rubrics that will be offered at his or her site.
#2. Building Your Rubrics. Simply put, a rubric can be seen as a grading sheet and a guide for how a reviewer will look at a petpage. (** I think the word a instead of your works better in this case because by writing your, you put the guide in the perspective of a requester instead of a reviewer.)
#3. Building Your Rubrics. Regardless if a score is given, rubrics give requesters clear indications of what reviewers will be critiquing.
#4. Building Your Rubrics. You might be surprised (remove comma) but creating your rubrics will not only be your first test, it will also be a difficult one. (** The use of the word but twice in the same sentence does not work for the sentence structure.)
#5. Different Types Of Rubrics - Classic. The essential thing to point out about this rubric is that it is intended for people who are serious about improving/changing their sites…
#6. Different Types Of Rubrics - Pro/Con. It's not meant to be all-encompassing like the "classic" review but instead, should be short and to the point - indicating what the site owner is doing right and what he or she needs to work on.
#7. Different Types Of Rubrics - Pro/Con. …both in terms of visual formatting and how it is written. (** This correction was made because initially you begin speaking about the formatting of the rubric, not the reviewer.)
#8. Different Types Of Rubrics - Pro/Con. Unlike "classic" rubrics which use multiple categories that each have a specific focus…
#9. Different Types Of Rubrics - Pro/Con. Also, as a reviewer, you're not forced to use strict categories…
#10. Different Types Of Rubrics - Pro/Con. Pro/con rubrics are generally written using paragraphs… (** I recommend that you include the word generally because some sites, such as my own, do not necessarily use bullet points to separate the various pros/cons. The format is really up to the reviewer.)
#11. Different Types Of Rubrics - Rubrics Gaining Popularity. ** I recommend that you include a subheader for this section to separate it from the more common rubric types.
#12. Different Types Of Rubrics - Custom. …as you can never predict what you'll be looking at until the visitor sends in his or her form.
#13. Different Types Of Rubrics - Custom. ** I recommend that you put the "Rubric title: Custom…" portion into one of your text boxes with a light border to separate it from the rest of the normal content.
#14. Caution: What Should Never Be In A Rubric? …there are always certain categories that (remove I inevitably find that) make me chuckle or worse, grimace.
#15. Caution: What Should Never Be In A Rubric? ** I would have to disagree with your general statement about Updates in rubrics. One thing that irks me when I visit sites, especially request sites, is when they do not have an updates section at all. As a frequent visitor of sites, I usually check updates first in order to see if requests are open or being completed at a fair pace. This is usually a huge factor on my decision to request from the site or not. Because it is such a vital portion of certain site's functions, I think that you should refrain from writing that updates should never be included in a rubric.
I agree that it is unfair to deduct points for a lack of updates/frequent updates in a review if the site does not need them. Certainly, as you mentioned, guides and resource sites do not need to update daily, nor do they even need to have updates. However, the frequency of updates is not the only criteria that can be used to assess updates. Clarity and conciseness are two other important aspects. Perhaps a section focusing on updates alone would not suffice - instead a category for updates/introduction for example would work, as some sites may solely be assessed on their introductions while others would be marked based on the two combined.
To conclude, I suppose you could consider this a personal preference but I think that writing that updates should never be in a rubric in your reviewing guide is a bit misleading.
#16. Be Careful About These Categories - Sitely ** I would also slightly disagree about your statement about having no listers. Though a site does not require listers, it is very beneficial for a site to be listed at a few directories. This is because in order for a site to be useful to the community, it must be visited by others. If a fantastic guide is written, its purpose will not be served if no one visits it. Directories can help to increase traffic to sites and distribute their content, which is why I believe that ensuring that a site is listed at at least the major directories is key to its success. I do, however, agree with your quantity point.
#17. Be Careful About These Categories - Sitely. If someone had the link back buttons at the very bottom, the achievements at the top, and the credits on an "extras" page, that wouldn't be a very organized "sitely" page.
#18. Be Careful About These Categories - Sitely. Keep in mind, the "sitely" page should contain things that involve the site, such as information about where it's been reviewed at, who its affiliates are, and its site counter or visitor tracker.
#19. Be Careful About These Categories - Content Quantity. In my own review forms, I ask that requesters give me an indication of how long their sites have ben active just so I can measure the quantity on their sites versus their sites' ages.
#20. Be Careful About These Categories - Content Quantity. What is unfair is docking marks if a site only has five banners, but in reality, it's only been open for three days. (** Perhaps also add in a point that says You can usually find out when a site was first opened in its introductory paragraph.)
#21. Be Careful About These Categories - Content Quantity. Let's say an untaken name site has 100 names and it's been open for three months.
#22. To Score Or Not To Score. At the very start of the review, he or she has 10 points.
#23. To Score Or Not To Score - Pro/Con Table. ** I recommend that you add a few breaks (br) after the last bullet point for Letter grade to better align the bullets. Currently, the bullets for Letter Grade begin much lower than those for Numbers. The ones for Stars also seems a bit misaligned.
#24. To Score Or Not To Score - Pro/Con Table. ** As well, it may be a good idea to bold and colour the positive (green) and negative (red) signs in the table, as currently it is a bit difficult to notice them.
#25. To Score Or Not To Score. Not really because the more text on a site, the higher the chances of making typos. (** Your current sentence is also lacking the period at the end.)
#26. To Score Or Not To Score. Is he or she consistently making errors on each page? Does he or she spell a certain word wrong every single time? For example, if the word review is present at the site multiple times and it is written as…
#27. An In-Depth Rubric Reflects… Is he or she looking at quantity? Quality? Will he or she be looking at how textures are applied? Text visibility? The site owner hasn't done enough to properly clarify his or her expectations or what his or her focus will be.
#28. An In-Depth Rubric Reflects... (spelling errors have not been changed as the section has been copied directly from the site).
#29. An In-Depth Rubric Reflects... He starts off with a brief paragraph discussing what the category…
#30. An In-Depth Rubric Reflects... …with a list of questions that he'll head into the review with.
#31. An In-Depth Rubric Reflects... In one of its rubrics, The Lodge does an amazing job with this section.
#1. Opening Part. ** I recommend that you rearrange the sentences in the first paragraph as so:
When you begin your review, it's best to take some questions with you. Below are some (deleted the word "questions") that I personally like to use for certain site genres. These "premade" questions will help you focus your attention on the important things. Of course you don't have to use these... (etc.)
I believe that this altered order of phrases makes more sense to a reader because it introduces the "premade" questions and indicates where they are before their purposes are explained.
#2. Questions For Each Site Type - Graphics. In terms of assessing graphics, look at what the site owner has done. Is his or her colouring technique eye-catching? Has he or she applied textures properly or has he or she not blended it into the base image?
#3. Questions For Each Site Type - Request Sites. Because these are request sites, I always try to relate my critique back to the visitors and their requesting experiences. (** I've changed the object of the sentence to plural because in the previous sentence, you have already begun by addressing request sites.).
#4. Questions For Each Site Type - Request Sites. Rules: The vast majority of request sites will have some form of "rules" on their pages.
#5. Questions For Each Site Type - Request Sites. ... move through the site, and pick-up their custom items.
#6. Questions For Each Site Type - Request Sites. When you read through the list of rules, can you find any major restrictions? (** This is because the phrase Reading through the list of rules requires that after the comma, is the subject of the sentence. However, it would be awkward to put the word you after the comma so I have instead reworded the portion before the comma.)
#7. Questions For Each Site Type - Request Sites. Are they clear to understand? Are they too easy to catch?
#8. Questions For Each Site Type - Request Sites. In their "pick up" areas, do they provide the codes in textareas? Do they write the names of the requesters above their respective request?
#9. Questions For Each Site Type - Review Sites. ...the list of rules should be a key area to look at (Do they make sense?...
#10. Questions For Each Site Type - Review Sites. ...you'll need to read through at least two or three of his or her most recent work...
#11. Questions For Each Site Type - Review Sites. Is the reviewer fully explaining his or her opinion?
#12. Questions For Each Site Type - Review Sites. Is the site owner putting his or her reviews into a tiny div box?
#13. Questions For Each Site Type - Review Sites. Has the reviewer explained each category properly or is he or she leaving it almost blank?
#14. Questions For Each Site Type - Review Sites. If possible to find out, is the site owner finishing his or her reviews within seven days? (Checking the updates can possibly help you with this question.)
#15. Questions For Each Site Type - Button Request Sites. ... the text is the most important thing on a button.
#16. Questions For Each Site Type - Button Request Sites. Did he or she explain why he or she doesn't make buttons for those types of sites?
#17. Questions For Each Site Type - Button Request Sites. Perhaps for the second question, you can include something along the lines of "are the animations for the buttons slow enough for a person to read the text?"
#18. Questions For Each Site Type - Button Request Sites. Has he or she remembered to include border=0 in the code?
#19. Question For Each Site Type - Premade Layouts While the designing part is easier... (** You don't want to imply that designing is easy, as some people may find that the most difficult part!)
#20. Question For Each Site Type - Premade Layouts Because layouts take far longer to create and finish (as compared to what?)...
#21. Question For Each Site Type - Premade Layouts Still, you'll want to look at how much content is on the site. (** To avoid saying "they".)
#22. Question For Each Site Type - Premade Layouts I'd suggest using screenshot instead of screenie in general, as it is more professional sounding than the latter slang.
#23. Questions For Each Site Type - Layout Request Sites. ...and where the navigation is placed.
#24. Questions For Each Site Type - Layout Request Sites. Include a comma between the phrases so that when a visitor loads the page and it's one of the first things...
#25. Questions For Each Site Type - Layout Request Sites. ...it's one of the first things he or she sees.
#26. Questions For Each Site Type - Guides/Tutorials. Insert a comma between the phrases whether text-based or visual and can be interesting to review.
#27. Questions For Each Site Type - Guides/Tutorials. ...has he or she included a fixed "back to the top" link?
#28. Questions For Each Site Type - Guides/Tutorials. ..has he or she fully explained his or her reasoning?
#29. Questions For Each Site Type - Guides/Tutorials. ...has he or she included screenshots to help guide the reader?
#30. Questions For Each Site Type - Guides/Tutorials. Or is he or she being unprofessional and using multiple...
#31. Questions For Each Site Type - Guides/Tutorials. If it's a more "visual guide" (like how to make buttons or banners), are there screenshots or visual examples included to aid the reader? Are there any areas where there aren't any visual aids?
#32. Questions For Each Site Type - Link Directories. ** Remove the word also under the important category Convenience, as this is the first section you talk about so the word becomes redundant..
#33. Questions For Each Site Type - Link Directories. ** Some of your important categories are listed as questions. You may consider including these under the Questions header instead.
#34. Questions For Each Site Type - Link Directories. Based on how old the site is, are there enough sites listed?
#35. Questions For Each Site Type - Link Directories. Are the link categories clearly defined? Or are different categories lumped together like requests with general graphics?
#36. Questions For Each Site Type - General Questions. Are the link back buttons high-quality?
#37. Questions For Each Site Type - General Questions. Are appropriate header used to divide each category?
#38. Questions For Each Site Type - General Questions. Has he or she listed where he or she got resources, images, or textures?
#39. Questions For Each Site Type - General Questions. Has he or she used text styles appropriately?
#40. Questions For Each Site Type - General Questions. Has the site owner introduced himself or herself and linked to his or her userlookup?
#41. Questions For Each Site Type - General Questions. Is all of the key information included? (Site name, what the site offers, and link to the site owner's userlookup) (remove period)
#42. Questions For Each Site Type - General Questions. Is the site owner being overly wordy?
#43. Questions For Each Site Type - General Questions. Organization can refer to where the site owner places his or her content, or how he or she has ordered the content on a specific page.
#44. Questions For Each Site Type - General Questions. Is space being used effectively?
#45. Questions For Each Site Type - General Questions. Is there any rhyme and reason to how content is separated? For example has he or she properly put banners and icons or separate pages or has he or she lumped everything together?